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Last Night in Japan | Original Poetry

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It was just for one night in that dimly lit izakaya that his blood pressure was elevated to  the dizzying heights of Nanda Devi —  the snowy summit that he used to climb.

Booze blew through his nostrils as he drank one too many shots of sake and wrapped his arms around  a woman with an ivory face —  the white paint of which he did not peel away with his fingertips before that night.

But the paint was peeling and the flakes were falling from the wall in the master bedroom that night where his wife was still on her knees, praying that Mr. Sakhoby will have safety on his business trip —  she did not rest her aching joints on satin sheets.

Hers was not the only sheets left untouched, for out in the streets that very night was his firstborn — and only — son biking around in the back alleys  with his newly adopted blood brothers and getting his first taste of ecstasy —  to jump out of the marbled cell and fly away.

Neither Mrs. nor Sakhoby Jr. knew how in that night his blood pressure shot up in a flurry of ecstatic kisses, and how  in the land where the sun rises he could do nothing but leave before the cock crowed.


This was an original poem exploring the intersection between family disintegration and substance abuse.


Upvotes and comments are always appreciated! ❤️

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Comments · 27

  • @tryskele(65)· 2588d

    Beautifully written and presented @joeylim.

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  • @jayna(75)· 2590d

    You’ve really captured a family flying apart so poignantly, @joeylim. When we don’t put energy and love into our relationships, they can’t be sustained. Beautiful work, my friend.

  • @blockurator(65)· 2590d

    Nice job. Much of the poetry you read in places like this is hackneyed, but this actually had a good ring to it. Very well done @joeylim.

  • @mrnightmare89(74)· 2590d

    found it in #pypt discord, oh lovely poetry.

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  • @bluefinstudios(72)· 2590d

    WOW! Well done, @joeylim This was visceral and very real! I enjoyed it.

    Thanks @thekittygirl for presenting this on @pypt #pypt

  • @thekittygirl(74)· 2590d

    This is a wonderful piece of work with great imagery and interesting twists. I love the segue between each of the verses. Nicely executed and fascinating! Bravo! 🙌 Love the image you chose, too! resteemed

    Tagging @enginewitty so he will see this poem...

  • @steemflow(80)· 2590d

    Wowow ....I never knew the secret poet in you. Perfect line...

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  • @wonderwop(67)· 2591d

    Perfect @joeylim, you really rocked this one. 👍👍

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  • @princessmewmew(67)· 2591d

    POWER!!!

  • @nickyhavey(74)· 2591d

    Beautiful my friend, just beautifully done! :)

  • @julianhorack(76)· 2591d

    The upshot is an upvote on the last shot by a parting poet. Get those creativecoins rolling.

  • @blueeyes8960(71)· 2591d

    @joeylim Very poignant poem. Substance abuse and the effects on the families is a real topic of concern.

  • @free-reign(67)· 2591d

    Wonderful poetry, delving into the depths of something we can't prepare for, and that we don't really understand until it visits us personally. Very moving.

  • @owasco(73)· 2591d

    Excellent poem! I am floored. There are so many overlapping and powerful moments/events/misconceptions that I'll be chewing on this one for days. How do I get the attention of @curie on this one? Hopefully I just did.

  • @traciyork(75)· 2591d

    The way your poetry flows is amazing, @joeylim! Transitions like this...

    a woman with an ivory face — the white paint of which he did not peel away with his fingertips before that night.

    But the paint was peeling and the flakes were falling from the wall in the master bedroom that night where his wife was still on her knees,

    ... are not easy to do well (in my experience, anyway), and you've used them here with great success. Wonderful, evocative, prose, and... woman writing congrats.gif

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  • @papilloncharity(83)· 2591d

    A potent poem here my friend! Blessings!

  • @brittandjosie(76)· 2591d

    Just only WOW

  • @hlezama(74)· 2591d

    Beautiful and poignant. Selffishness is the first ingredient of desintegration and everything falls after that. Beautiful images, very elegant depiction of what otherwise might have been a nasty element in the equation. It is certainly one of the most damaging. May none of our kids go through the hells of drug abuse and all the evils that accompany it.

  • @redheadpei(72)· 2591d

    Nicely done @joeylim!

  • @wales(68)· 2591d

    Well told, clear and concise, with a touch of pathos

  • @joanstewart(75)· 2591d

    Nicely expressed poetry @joeylim well done!

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